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ezra watercolor test

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quick painting to pass the time between studies...
i don't like how it came out. I may take it down after receiving critiques.
Image size
2040x2484px 1.58 MB
Date Taken
Feb 4, 2016, 12:02:05 AM
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:star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

Whoa... meant to get to this days ago. Sorry about that! ANYHOW...

First off, your watercolors are so lovely! You have a really nice handle with color and the control over the paints. Nice texture and control.
The way you have most of her enclosed in the circle, but her head peeking out of it is also a really touch. Adds a great element of interest, and a nice compositional element.

A few things though, is the jawline seems a bit too wide and far back on the neck. It seems like it should come forward just a hair, somewhere near where the ear starts on the left side. It's also a little bit high. As a general rule the bottom of the ear is close to where the bottom of the nose lands, and the jaw stops just before the ear.
Eyes are also about one eye width apart, and the corners of the mouth are roughly half way into the eye. Like, if you were to move the mouth directly under both eyes, each corner would almost line up half way into each eye.

And it could just be me, but it seems the spine is a bit too pronounced. Though, since she's not human, that could very well be art of her kind, or just her physical make-up, so this part could just me being a little too nit-picky

And one suggestion that's really not super important but something that I'll mention, is that Ezra could possibly be a little bit bigger in the circle and take up more of it, or be shifted to the other side to where she's inside where the direction she's looking isn't so close to the edge of the picture. Composition wise it kind of brings the viewer over to the side and out of the picture quicker than it could with it changed up a bit.
BUT, the blank space of the orange-red of the circle compared to Ezra is great. It's got a really nice balance!

Over all, this is really nice. The expression on her face and her pose is interesting and makes me wonder what she might be thinking, and what happened before this moment in time in the picture. Keep up the really awesome watercolors!